This post deals with my tutor’s feedback on assignment 4 (see here for assignment), with detailed feedback contained in pdfs referenced below.
Overall very positive feedback (noted in the text mark-up). There are a few points to address, which I intend to pickup in a revision to the original essay:
- A few points to make clearer (eg I didn’t refer to the original MoMA catalogue of Family of Man, but the 70th anniversary edition!)
- A few improvements to referencing, including staying clear of Wiki, even if to say it was the only place online I could find something mentioned.
- Recommended writing in the 3rd person. (rewrite is here)
- Tutor kindly provided a copy of a text created himself in response to self-portraits – for study and response through the blog.
So, a number of useful recommendations to further tighten my original essay and align it to a traditional academic style.
Tutor feedback (overall comments) – http://context.fitzgibbonphotography.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/04/Andrew-Fitzgibbon-Assignment-04-Feedback-Report.pdf
Tutor feedback (text markup on essay) – http://context.fitzgibbonphotography.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/04/Andrew-Fitzgibbon-Assignment-4.1.pdf